Tuesday, January 27, 2009

Friend Prompt

The word is "CARING" that describes me. I think that the word caring best describes me because, when any of my friends have a problem i do the best I can to help them. One time back in third grade my friend was having trouble with a bully. When she told me I told her to tell the teacher on her and that hopefully the teacher will talk to that person that's bullying her. A few days later my friend told me that she no longer had problems with that person whom was bullying her. If I didn't help her with her problem she probably would have gotten bullied through the rest of Grade School. That is why I think the word "CARING" best describes me as a friend!!!
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4 comments:

  1. Jonathan HarrisonJanuary 27, 2009 at 9:18 AM

    I think you did well at staying on topic. Also it has a lot of your voice in it, like you were writing it. Also it was a nice long example.
    I think you need to work on getting a better hook, because it sounds boring at first.
    Well that's all I have to say.

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  2. Carlos RamirezMarch 9, 2009 at 9:08 AM

    i agrre with jonatan

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  3. moeshaalexabderMarch 11, 2009 at 9:03 AM

    Christa u did good but u just need a few more detales and need to indent a new paragraph.

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  4. Nichole BurtonMarch 11, 2009 at 9:25 AM

    caring dosnt describe you that much you should of chose a different word and you should of thought of more examples other than that it was good

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